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Lit & Soc – Writer’s Revision Sheet

Original
(what you wrote)
 Revision
(how it changed after feedback)
 Explanation/Rule
(catchy way to remember next time)
Magazine Ad – Cluttered
 Spread out words around the page
 Unprofessional, didn't really look like an ad
Diary Entry–
My team lived up to the moment I will forever remember this group of men
not only as teammates but as family
 "we proved ourselves as the best in the league, these are not just teamates they are brothers."
 Too formal, Born in the innercity.
Player profile- orginally just had the graph of stats
 Gave insight to what the stats are actually representing
 Make the project your own
Cover page- "commeritive"
 "commemorative"
 proper spelling is crucial to getting the point across
Interview- Only one question
 added a second question as to how it impacted Ray Lewis
 pointless to have genre without any substance
Professional genre- Ray Lewis is the best linebacker in history.
 Even through Ray Lewis had a hard childhood he lived up to his full potentioal.
 Covers everything I already wanted to but a bigger overview of where he came from.